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Dark Armageddon skies and seas
Rain lashing diamonds through the trees
Humming lamps above my head
Blurs chasing vision, blue and red
Exploding stars beyond the clouds
Cries for freedom, silent - - loud
Gray rooms with shadows questioning
Bells and whispers, Anklets -- Rings
Clocktowers and Conflagrations
Inundations, inspiration
Chaos spiraling into Order
Crash of metal, concrete, mortar
Not quite sleeping, not quite present
Eyelids flit to Luminescence
Hoodlums, vandals, young and crazed
Paint in cans to cure the aged
Apathy, daymares, synonyms
Bending to the social winds
Run and rhyme to maintain mood
Lunar patterns, nights to brood
Primal howls, Havoc packs
Youth is like a heart attack
On the bridge between two breaths
Haunting life and taunting death
Then gentle as the river flow
Gripping Tight.
Letting Go.
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More interesting if you read it out loud to yourself and find the rhythm switch at "apathy, daymares, synonyms". I hope you enjoy it. (Bio Class, 2:12, 04/06)

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Great structure, though I feel that the flow falters slightly in places (for example the Conflagration line).
"On the bridge between two breaths
Haunting life and taunting death" - What a fantastic image!

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Like a cat in a tumble dryer O.0
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Thank you! I love that you actually took the time to give me some advice too. That always excites me =)

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In the room the women come and go
Talking of Michelangelo.
- The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock
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:D Heh, next time I'll probably fave and run!

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Like a cat in a tumble dryer O.0

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